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Battle Nurse

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Who's ready for their flu shot?
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:star::star::star-half::star-empty::star-empty: Overall
:star::star::star-half::star-empty::star-empty: Vision
:star::star::star-half::star-empty::star-empty: Originality
:star::star::star-half::star-empty::star-empty: Technique
:star::star::star-half::star-empty::star-empty: Impact

Please ignore the stars. I don't use them. :>

Your colors are really nice. You've balanced bold colors and muted colors, and the use of hot pink, yellow, and red to draw attention to her face was well-executed. Nice job!

Your piece is really great anatomy-wise, though her arms seem to be of different lengths. It's also probably useful to note that the upper arm generally ends at the same point the ribcage ends. In other words, her left (your right) upper arm is too long.

One of the biggest things that strike me is her right hand. It's bent too far upwards, in an uncomfortable position. Moreover, it doesn't press into the fabric of her clothing. Unless she's just holding her hand in the air (uncomfortable), this wouldn't make much sense.

Her right shoulder also sticks out quite a bit too far, which is pretty... weird. Not much to elaborate on that. Trace the ribcage and shoulder joint maybe?

Another problems seems to be with the shading. Where is the light coming from? The shading is on the inside of her right leg AND the inside of her left leg! That's questionable. Keep your light source consistent. Unless you have more than one light sources, which would involve ambient light and also complexity.

For a composition like this, try not to crop so near the stuff in your piece. The edge of the canvas is too near the tip of the syringe that she's holding, which feels odd and pretty irksome. (Try zooming out often while doing your pieces.)

The lineart is a bit messy and blurry in places. Try to use a large canvas when drawing, so when you scale it down to post, your lines seem more solid. When you mess up a line, erase cleanly. Sketchy lines are good and well, but it looks like you were aiming for clean lineart. Also line thickness. I'm no expert at line variation, but just be conscious of where you choose to put your thick lines and where you choose to put your thin lines. Why are the lines around her neck really thick compared to the line outlining her cheek?

And the last point: research and accuracy. Though these are really nit-picky points and probably don't make much of a difference, getting these things right are really super-great. (you'll get brownie points) Research everything. Even if you think you know everything about it. Shrimp? Google. Baby pigeons? Google. Mongolian archery? Google. But seriously, Google is your friend. Use the Google.

Remember that shirts kind of smooth over the breasts. Shirts don't wrap around them tightly, usually. Unless they are designed to. But even with that, there's still other factors affecting how shirts work. Reference? Reference! s3.amazonaws.com/media.hautelo…

This brings me to another point— the seams on her shirt. Those are called princess seams. They usually extend from near the bottom of the shirt, and then diverge and end at the bust, or at the shoulders. And then there are seams on the back. That image I just linked shows that nicely. On your piece, the seams just extend from the bust and then almost converge. If those were on a real shirt, that would cause the shirt to look triangle-y. Princess seams reduce surface area in order to make an article of clothing appear more curvy.

Bandages! I'm assuming they are fighter wraps, so if they are not, disregard this. imgs.inkfrog.com/pix/kabicy/24… Fighter wraps! They work like so. Rarely extends to the upper arm, though liberties could be taken.

The syringe is the most glaring inaccuracy of all. If you decide to fix anything, fix this. (The other points were me being an asshole.) Syringes push the contents of the barrel towards the needle via a plunger. If the liquid is flowing towards the plunger, with space (air!!!) near the needle, there is an issue with your syringe.
www.lighthouseinstruments.com/… upload.wikimedia.org/wikipedia… www.dickinsonpd.com/images/syr… www.syringes.cn/img/insulin-sy…

The point is, understand what you're drawing, whether it be anatomy, or the function of a certain medical instrument. Understand how things work, and why things are there. Though your piece is cartoony, and liberties can be taken, the details and research behind a design that make it both functional and visually appealing push the piece to the next level.

Thanks for reading my critique! Overall, your piece is really well-done, and the flaws mostly come from the consistency and neatness of the linework, the shading, and the frick-fracking syringe. Good luck in your future artwork!